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I wish I could sing
I wish I could sing the sound of this sorrow
As it beats across the lake of our dreams
Mournful and hollow, it would
bounce, again and again
Echoing over our years
Never to rest again with life so sweet.

i wish I could look into your eyes
and you into mine

I long for the hum of your existence
to blend with the song of my life
and then to sing it, loudly
forever in this world
©2009 ~sumi1313
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You wanted me to comment on your poetry but I'm not sure what to say! Obviously you're a fantastic writer (and you're very talented) but I guess knowing exactly what this poem is about makes it hard for me to give good critique (that and the fact that I know nothing about writing!)

Its very, very good though.
I think you should write some new stuff too. :nod:

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we're not too far away

:nod: :heart:

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